Hello everyone,
Since some time I have been wanting to write. But I was one of those guys whose ambition was only triumphed by his lack of accomplishment. Always aiming for the big story, never writing much of it.
Finally I wised up and decided that I should first write a short story and see where it takes me.
So yesterday I did just that. And now I am starving for as much feedback as I can possibly get, since I lack any idea of how my writing actually resonates with someone who isn't me.
I realize that one should give a story time to mature before possibly just embarrassing oneself. And I will do that (no one I personally know gets to see the story for now, for instance). However, the starving man also needs something to endure.
About the story itself: The genre is sci-fi, more hard than soft. And it consist of five parts. The prolog, part one to three and the finale. It is all written down, but in German and so far only the prolog has been translated. So today I shall only post the prolog, but plan to subsequently translate and post the other four parts in the course of this week.
The length of the whole story is about nine pages (in German, which tends to be longer than English, and in my word document).
There is no title yet. But I haven't booked the story as finished, so that also seems premature.
At last, I would ask for your leniency, since this is my first whole story and my writer's heart is still soft and sensitive. You may also want to keep in mind that English is my second language.
However, I also welcome any feedback. About anything. At all. Including grammar nazism.
Thank you for your time and I dearly hope that it won't feel like a waist of it :)
Prolog
Since some time I have been wanting to write. But I was one of those guys whose ambition was only triumphed by his lack of accomplishment. Always aiming for the big story, never writing much of it.
Finally I wised up and decided that I should first write a short story and see where it takes me.
So yesterday I did just that. And now I am starving for as much feedback as I can possibly get, since I lack any idea of how my writing actually resonates with someone who isn't me.
I realize that one should give a story time to mature before possibly just embarrassing oneself. And I will do that (no one I personally know gets to see the story for now, for instance). However, the starving man also needs something to endure.
About the story itself: The genre is sci-fi, more hard than soft. And it consist of five parts. The prolog, part one to three and the finale. It is all written down, but in German and so far only the prolog has been translated. So today I shall only post the prolog, but plan to subsequently translate and post the other four parts in the course of this week.
The length of the whole story is about nine pages (in German, which tends to be longer than English, and in my word document).
There is no title yet. But I haven't booked the story as finished, so that also seems premature.
At last, I would ask for your leniency, since this is my first whole story and my writer's heart is still soft and sensitive. You may also want to keep in mind that English is my second language.
However, I also welcome any feedback. About anything. At all. Including grammar nazism.
Thank you for your time and I dearly hope that it won't feel like a waist of it :)
Prolog
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